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Week 7 Assignment 4: Email Revisions
Due Week 7 and worth 100 points

Revise the two (2) emails below to remove problematic content and help these students construct polite, effective email messages instead.

Scenario 1:

Susan’s Email:

Dear Professor Johnson,

I have a concern about the grade I received on the last paper that I wrote. I worked very hard and felt that I had wrote a good paper. I am wondering why I received the grade I did and what I could have done to get a better grade.

I am concerned that this grade could affect my overall grade, so if there is something I can do to avoid failing, please let me know what I can do, possibly write another draft of this paper if you will allow me.

Thank you for you for time and helping me understand what I could have done to write a better paper.

Sincerely,

Susan

Scenario 2:

Don’s Email:

Dear Professor Smith,

I am having a hard time in class and have been getting low grades on my papers. I feel like I am not understanding and/or retaining the information and material we are studying.

I am writing you to ask for help in passing the class. Is there any way that you can help me better understand the material? I was also wondering if you would possibly allow me to do some extra credit to help improve my overall grade? I am also going to find out about getting a tutor. Perhaps you can recommend someone?

I look forward to receiving your input and thank you for your time.

Sincerely,

Don